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    Well, Heiti and Renegade are sort of a side story for most of the book. Mella begins as a device to introduce Neo, Skylight, and Nightflier and then becomes one of the main characters. And Winger is sort of an important-but-absent figure till the end.

    Posted Jan 24, 2010, 06:28:09 PM


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    anybody mind reviewing Chapter Three for me?
    if you need a recap just tell me. Thanks!

         

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    Okay, since I've been on my PC recently to download Wolfquest 2, I thought I might as well work on Flash. I finished chapter 2 and started chapter 3. I can't remember what I posted, so I'll just start at the beginning of chapter 2:

    Chapter 2

    MASK

     

     

    “Mask!”

                Berry yelled loudly as soon as we got clear of the trees.

                I froze, looking around. I thought most gryphons lived in trees or mountains, but apparently I was wrong.

                Because these lived in caves.

                I stared at the elaborate system of openings honeycombed across the rock face. It was the small mountain Starless, Cloud and I had always fantasized about, making up tales about elves and gnomes that lived in it. Who knew that real creatures made their home inside the rock?

                “Berry, you realize there’s a stranger standing right behind you?” A calm voice came from the topmost cave and a small, dark-colored chick stepped out of the shadows and sat on his haunches, gazing down at us. A white patch blazed across his eyes, giving him the appearance of wearing a Mask.

                “I know. Sun met him in the woods. Flash, this is Mask!” Berry turned to me eagerly, gesturing with a wing towards the chick.

                The chick bobbed his head in my direction and opened his wings, gliding down to a stop just a little farther than a normal gryphon was. At first, I was offended, but then I looked closely at his eyes, which seemed paler than average. And as he placed one talon forward to feel the ground before stepping towards me, I realized why.

                Mask was blind.

                “Nice to meet you, Flash,” he said pleasantly, dipping his head. “I’m Mask, as Berry pointed out.”

                I blinked to recover. “Uh, yeah. Nice to meet you too,” I said, my voice sounding a little off as I tried to think out how he knew exactly where I was.

                “You’ve notice my eyes, haven’t you?” Mask sounded rueful, and immediately I felt bad.

                “Err, well, it’s just… I’ve never…”

                “You’ve never met a blind gryphon before,” he finished for me.

                I flushed, embarrassed. “Well… yeah.”

                He shrugged. “No worries. Not many have, besides my family. But I can function perfectly. My hearing and smell, and even touch, is much better than the average gryphon. I can even tell you’re smaller than normal. You’re footsteps are much lighter than Berry’s, Owl’s, or mine.”

                “You could tell from all the way up there?” I asked in disbelief.

                He chuckled. “I couldn’t feel you, but I could smell you.”

                “But I haven’t taken a step since I saw you!”

                “Yeah you have. When you first noticed my eyes, you took an involuntary step back. I could feel that.”

                I blinked in surprise, then lifted a foot and stared at it. “Am I really that much lighter than usual?” I knew I was small (how else could I have gotten the nickname squirt?) but to have it be obvious to even a blind chick was pretty hurtful.

                “Yeah, but that’s not a problem. You may have some difficulty going against the wind, but you’ll be a fast flyer.”

                I smiled ruefully. “If I ever learn.”

                Mask looked surprised. “You mean you’ve never been taught to fly? Even if you’re small, so long as your wings are proportionate, you can still fly. Are your wings disproportionate?”

                I didn’t even know what disproportionate meant. “Um… no? Wolf said my wings were good.”

                “Wolf’s an idiot. You should get Eagle or Breeze to look at it. Or, better yet, Jay. She’ll give you a fair evaluation.”

                “Eval… Mask, why do you use so many big words?”

                He chuckled. “Jay and Sun didn’t want me to fly at first. I spent a lot of time with Moon and Breeze. They talk with big words, too. I guess I just picked it up.”

                I laughed, and then tilted my head. “Who’re Moon and Sun? Or Jay, or Eagle? How many of you are there? Do you all live in caves?”

                He stood up. “My paw’s falling asleep. Come to my cave and I’ll tell you. You can meet Owl, too.” He shook out his wings and leaped off, beating his way to his cave. I don’t know how he knew exactly where it was; maybe he was psychic or something. But he landed and turned to wait.

                I took a deep breath and spread my own wings. They were sore and tired from being used so much after months of neglect, and it was all I could do to flap my way up and land heavily in front.

                Without waiting, Mask abruptly turned and walked inside. I followed, and then stopped to look around.

                I’m not sure what I was expecting. Rough edges and sharp corners all around, I guess. And there were plenty of edges and corners, but they all looked purposeful. They were there for a reason; here was a large one, made just the right shape for a sleeping young gryphon. Over there was a slightly indented area, which could hold things. And everywhere you looked, things were smooth. The roof and walls seemed to have been rubbed with a rock or something to smooth it out and make it round.

                “Wow,” I whispered, barely audible. But apparently Mask had super-gryphon hearing, because he smiled slightly. Well, either that or I’d spoken louder than I meant to.

                “You like it? This is where I live. Owl lives here, too, but I think she’s asleep. She’ll wake up once we start talking.” He settled himself on the floor of the cave with his hind paws underneath him and his talons stretching out in front. “So. You wanted to know about us? Well, to start, there are eleven of us. The oldest is Eagle. He actually founded our flock, and made the caves able to be used to live in. He was much younger, then, of course. His daughter is Jay, my mom. Sun was her mate, and my dad. They’re also the parents of Owl and Berry. Jay and Sun have four older chicks, Wolf, Freeze, Moon, and Breeze. Wolf and Freeze are the oldest, and they’re out with Jay and Sun a lot, patrolling and hunting and stuff. Moon and Breeze are twins; Moon is the oldest. He thinks it makes him all special. Breeze isn’t as vain; she more often than not is the one to shove Moon off his pedestal.” Mask smiled at some private memory. “And then there’s Owl, Berry, and me. We’re the youngest.”

                “So what do the others look like?” I asked, shifting my sitting position to one on the floor. I was surprised at how it was almost soft. “What are they like?”

                Mask laughed again. “Right. Ask the blind chick what the others look like.”

                I blushed. “Sorry. I didn’t mean it.”

                He smiled. Mask smiled a lot. “No worries. It happens. I suppose I should take it as a compliment that I’m so extraordinarily normal that you forget I’m blind.”

                “You’re doing it again,” I accused.

                He blinked. “Doing what again?”

                “Using big words.”

                He laughed. “Sorry. So, anyway, what do they look like? See for yourself. But I can tell you what they’re like on the inside. Like I said, Moon is vain. But he’s actually pretty nice. He taught Berry to fly, and that took a while. Berry’s easily distracted and is, well, a bit of an idiot. Moon has patience to get through teaching her something big like that. But anyway, Breeze acts all sweet, but she’s really stubborn and smart. It’s really hard to trick Breeze. Freeze is a huge jokester. Once he even tried to prank Jay, which got him at least a month of sentry duty. He doesn’t like making decisions, but if someone makes it for him he’ll get really mad. He’s the one most likely to do something with us chicks, though, so we don’t mind. Wolf is like, the ultimate big sister. She’s uber-protective, loyal, and gets seriously ticked off if anyone tries to do something to her family. It’s kind of annoying sometimes, but it’s also nice. Berry absolutely adores her, but Owl’s more likely to get her feathers ruffled by anyone hinting she can’t take on an army and beat them all with a single claw, her wings clipped, and without a scratch on her.” Mask laughed again, apparently at a memory. Maybe it involved an army. For all I knew, it could.  

                “So what’s Berry like?” I asked. I had a bit of previous experience, but I wasn’t sure if that was an act or something.

                Mask grinned. “Berry? Well…. She’s a ditz, a klutz, and easily distracted. She has a bad sense of direction, no sense of time, and is afraid of flies. Everyone loves her.”

                “What’s a ditz?” I asked, not having heard anything after the first words. I was like that; I’d get hung up on something I didn’t understand and not hear anything else while I thought about it.

                “Basically, she’s an idiot,” Mask said.

                “Oh. Do you love her?” I asked. Mask sounded almost rueful when he spoke about her. I wondered if he was jealous.

                “Of course I do. But the ironic thing is, she’s completely oblivious”—he glanced at me as I opened my mouth—“meaning she doesn’t notice. She thinks everyone loves me more, because I’m blind. Which is a lie, by the way. I only get special treatment from Jay and Wolf, the mothers. To everyone else, I’m just another chick.”

                “Are you jealous?” I asked, sitting up a little. There was never drama at my nest; Cloud was too sweet to dislike anyone, and Starless didn’t care what anyone else said about him, giving no basis for me to say anything. But here… Well, who knew? With so many different gryphons, age groups, and personalities, maybe drama was a regular thing.

                “No way!” Mask exclaimed. “I’m not jealous of Berry.”

                I smirked. “Liar.”

                “Am not.”

                “Are too. You are so jealous!” I fluttered back a few steps as Mask swiped at me playfully.

                “Shut up, Flash,” he muttered.

                “Sure, Mask,” I said, still grinning. “I won’t tell anyone you’re jealous.”

                If he wasn’t blind, I’m sure he would’ve been staring a hole right through me.

     

    Chapter 3

    OWL

     

     

                “Mask, are you done with the newbie yet?” An annoyed, female voice pierced Mask’s cave.

                “Yes, Owl, I am,” Mask said, clearly still annoyed at me.

                I turned around, still feeling a little smug but trying to hide it. In the entrance stood a female gryphon chick, about our size, maybe a little bigger. She was brown, which I guessed was a sensible color to have when you live in the woods. Her pose was striking, with her head high, her wings folded lightly against her sides, and her eyes flashing.

                “Uh, hi. I guess you’re Owl. I’m Flash,” I said, feeling a little awkward.

                Owl nodded. “Yeah, that’s me. Nice to meet you, Flash. Sun wants to introduce you to the others.”

                “Sure, I guess,” I said. “So… where is he?”

                “Outside. Come on, I’ll show you. Mask, you can come if you like,” she said, looking over my shoulder.

                I heard Mask snort from behind me. “No thanks. In fact, I feel pretty tired.” Making an obviously fake yawn, I heard him pointedly curl up.

                Owl stifled a laugh. “Come on, Flash. Let’s go.”

                When we were outside, she turned to me, laughing. “What’d you do to ruffle Mask’s feathers that badly?” she asked.

                “I told him he was jealous of Berry,” I said, feeling almost proud now.

                “You didn’t! I can’t believe he let you get away with that!” Owl looked distinctly impressed.

                I lifted me head, definitely proud now. “I don’t think he wanted to. He probably would’ve bitten my head off if you hadn’t shown up,” I admitted.

                “You’re welcome, then,” Owl said, barely suppressing laughter. “Now come on, everyone’s waiting.” She spread her wings and glided down to the main clearing. I followed, though my wings complained loudly.

                “Ah, there you are, Flash!” Sun said as I landed.

                I nodded. “Yes, sir,” I said. I dunno why, but Sun made me feel kind of sheepish and inferior.

                “No need to call me sir, kid. I’m just Sun.” He gave me a fatherly smile, then turned to the assembled gryphons.

                I tried to pick out who was who by what Mask had told me. In the back must be Eagle; he was obviously the oldest. The female beside him must be Jay, because she looked about the same age as Sun. Wolf sat beside her, watching Berry more than Sun. I smiled, recognizing her from earlier. A white male was stretched out comfortingly beside Wolf, a permanent playful smile on his face. I guessed that was Freeze. Two silver gryphons sat in front. I picked out Moon and Breeze more from their genders than anything else.

               



    After this, Sun just goes on to make a speech and stuff.

     

    Posted Feb 06, 2010, 04:16:18 PM


    "Is this the result of mass comunication? Worldwide brain death?"
    -- Thornbeak

    "Yeah, cause that's not loopy at all."
    -- Danny

     

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    “And it harm none, do what ye will”.


    I believe in dragons, good men, and other fantasy creatures.

    If ignorance is bliss, why aren't more people happy?

    Misspellers of the world, unit!

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    so, it's valentine's day. and still, no boyfriend for me. I have two things to share specially for today.
    one is a love poem that I wrote, even though I don't have anyone to give it to.
    Blue as the ocean and just as deep,
    your eyes hold mine and I'm yours to keep.
    Please hold me close, and whisper in my ear:
    I love you, I love you,
    I love you, my dear.

    and the second is food for depressing thought. here's a song called Valentine's Day that Linkin Park wrote:

    my insides all turn to ash / so slow
    and blew away as i collapsed / so cold
    a black wind took them away / from sight
    and held the darkness over day / that night

    and the clouds above move closer
    looking so dissatisfied
    but the heartless wind kept blowing, blowing

    i used to be my own protection / but not now
    cause my path has lost direction / somehow
    a black wind took you away / from sight
    and held the darkness over day / that night

    and the clouds above move closer
    looking so dissatisfied
    and the ground below grew colder
    as they put you down inside
    but the heartless wind kept blowing, blowing

    so now you're gone
    and i was wrong
    i never knew what it was like
    to be alone

    on a valentine's day

    Posted Feb 14, 2010, 03:15:32 PM

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    nice, shadowflight! I'm not a big fan on linkin park, but I'm definitely feeling the "alone on a valentine's day"..

    I miss you all! how've you beeen? :)

    so recently I've become addicted to a show called "doctor who".. anyone heard of it? I lurve it, AND I'm in love with british accents so its like a dream come true *sigh*

    Posted Feb 16, 2010, 10:37:37 AM

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    She's alive! We miss you too! One of the only poets I actually enjoy. I have heard of Doctor Who, though I've never actually seen it. British accents are the bomb. How has writing been going for you?

    Posted Feb 16, 2010, 06:46:00 PM

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    Hey, you're not dead!

    Haha, I think all accents are cool. Except Spanish ones... I can never understand what they're saying. xD I love Aussie accents best.

    Posted Feb 17, 2010, 05:15:11 PM


    "Is this the result of mass comunication? Worldwide brain death?"
    -- Thornbeak

    "Yeah, cause that's not loopy at all."
    -- Danny

     

    Eight words the Rede fulfil
    “And it harm none, do what ye will”.


    I believe in dragons, good men, and other fantasy creatures.

    If ignorance is bliss, why aren't more people happy?

    Misspellers of the world, unit!

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    Accents rock; I love imitating them! British has always come naturally to me, and I've mastered German and Russian. Sometimes I can do an Irish or Scottish, but I'd really like to learn a Portuguese accent. However, it's rather difficult finding audio or video of a Portuguese person speaking English. . .

    I am such a language geek! Sorry 'bout that; I'll let you guys get back on topic now. Laughing

    Posted Feb 17, 2010, 08:28:01 PM

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    Ew. Aussie, Crewe? That's my least favorite. New Zealand, yes. Aussie? No! Russian accents are amazing. That's my fav, right next to British accents, of course.

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    I MELT every time I hear a british accent. And actually, the tenth doctor on doctor who has a SCOTTISH accent in real life, which is absolutely gorgeous *swoon*

    writing has been mehh unfortunately :( I'm doing a composition course for write-at-home, so not much time to write for FUN. I did start a story called the explorations of ivy redwing, but I don't have any kind of plot arc so I'm a little stuck :)

    but here's the prologue if you waaant:

    [story retracted 3/4/10]

    I wish I knew what to do with it! I like her name!

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    So do I!

    Um, what if Ivy decided she had enough of Taka, and went off to see was to the west?

    Posted Feb 18, 2010, 07:16:49 AM


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    "Yeah, cause that's not loopy at all."
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    “And it harm none, do what ye will”.


    I believe in dragons, good men, and other fantasy creatures.

    If ignorance is bliss, why aren't more people happy?

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    well, that was actually what I was planning (given the title), but I kind of need her to have something to look for or some kind of major goal in the end.. :\

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    First thing that popped into my head: Old stories. Y'know, the old geezers are telling the kids about like a wild land off in the far west, or a group off there. They can even be scary stories. And she wants to see if they're true, and is also sick of Taka, so she goes off.

    Or she meets some guy who once left Taka and returned with stories of different lands, and she wants to both see what he saw and maybe go farther and become famous or whatever.

    Either way, I can see her being branded a lunatic.

    Posted Feb 18, 2010, 08:25:19 PM


    "Is this the result of mass comunication? Worldwide brain death?"
    -- Thornbeak

    "Yeah, cause that's not loopy at all."
    -- Danny

     

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    “And it harm none, do what ye will”.


    I believe in dragons, good men, and other fantasy creatures.

    If ignorance is bliss, why aren't more people happy?

    Misspellers of the world, unit!

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    or maybe she can't be killed by Taka because she's really from somewhere else? but she goes off or the people cast her out..... and she goes west....

    Posted Feb 19, 2010, 07:19:28 PM

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    I'm so excited, I finished chapter 3 of Flash. This is the farthest I've ever been in writing, even if chapters 1 and 2 are like 2-3 pages each. xD

    I'm wondering if I should email it to my English teacher.

    I also wrote a poem about English class today! We were having a lesson on immigration cause we're reading The King of Mulberry Street, so she was sending kids out for ridiculous reasons. One for wearing a Texas sweatshirt when she's a Penn State fan (it's worth mentioning that he wore that sweatshirt for weeks beforehand), one for making a joke about the Gators, one for wearing short sleeves, and one for smiling. xD

    That sweatshirt was no good

    The joke just another blow

    So both were handed slips and ordered to go

    Those sleeves were too short to get past her eyes

    Another culprit covers her tracks

    A mischievous smile, a quiet laugh

    Our flag again flies at half-mast

    Everyone works, silence holds sway

    No one wants to be the next sent away

    The orders are given; no one objects

    Yet everyone's confused

    The accusations finally stopped

    But still, you could've heard a pin fall

    Hidden in their work, students give small smiles

    And nervous laughs, until at the door

    There was a soft rap

    It was the exiled! The ones sent away!

    The atmosphere lightened; it had all been a game

    The explanation came, at long last,

    It was just another lesson in English class

    Edit: Spaces between stanzas won't show up. -_-


    Last Modified Feb 19, 2010, 08:48:01 PM


    "Is this the result of mass comunication? Worldwide brain death?"
    -- Thornbeak

    "Yeah, cause that's not loopy at all."
    -- Danny

     

    Eight words the Rede fulfil
    “And it harm none, do what ye will”.


    I believe in dragons, good men, and other fantasy creatures.

    If ignorance is bliss, why aren't more people happy?

    Misspellers of the world, unit!

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    ah, the wonderful creative opportunities of english class :)
    speaking of which, we now have "self directed writing" every block day!!!! talk about perfect! as long as I show my teacher some work I can write in class for an hour! so what I did this week is finish Outcast!!! I'm so proud of myself, because it hasn't been touched since last year's writing festival. it still doesn't do much for me until I finish Flames of Avleon, but it's still cool.

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    *soooo jealous*

    If I were you, I'd print out Flash and work on it in school. It would at the very least keep it in the forefront of my mind. xD

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    EmilyRuth!! That's so AWESOME! "Writing lately is kinda mehh..." Oh sure ;)

    I got a new laptop today! I'm so excited! I haven't been able to do much writing because my family shared one desktop, but now I have my own computer and I can write so much more!!!!!

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    EmilyRuth!! That's so AWESOME! "Writing lately is kinda mehh..." Oh sure ;)

    I got a new laptop today! I'm so excited! I haven't been able to do much writing because my family shared one desktop, but now I have my own computer and I can write so much more!!!!!

    oooh, what kind? they are SO helpful :)

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    That is so awesome! My family also shares a desktop so I'm saving up to buy more own laptop. I'm hoping that will give me inspiration to write more. And how perfect will it be on car trips? I say, completely perfect! Enjoy, Vroengirl!

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    Lol. I definitely am, GwtB.

    It's a Mac, EmilyRuth, and I love it!! I used to be a PC person, but now I see the light. It's been a little hard to get used to the different controls, but it's so much better than a PC. And it's pretty and white and has a glowing apple on it. Hellloooooooo! :D

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    It's a Mac, EmilyRuth, and I love it!! I used to be a PC person, but now I see the light. It's been a little hard to get used to the different controls, but it's so much better than a PC. And it's pretty and white and has a glowing apple on it. Hellloooooooo! :D

    *drools*

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    That is so awesome! My family also shares a desktop so I'm saving up to buy more own laptop. I'm hoping that will give me inspiration to write more. And how perfect will it be on car trips? I say, completely perfect! Enjoy, Vroengirl!

    One of the reasons I want one. xD

    This one time, my mom put our house on this tour thing where people around town come walk around and look at your house, so we had to be out for like 3-4 hours. We spent it for the most part driving aimlessly around town. I brought my mom's laptop, but it has a really crappy writing thing and I only have a few stories on it (Renengade, Codename: Shock and Invisible Stars) all of which I'd started AFTER... so, it wasn't much use unless we parked in front of a house and I could steal their Internet for a bit. xD

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    I have a laptop, though it was my grandfather's old one. (its a Dell inspiron 6000). it serves its purpose, but sometimes it is slow.  I thinking that when this one dies, (which my dad says is in the near future), i will get a new one.  but right now, ive got all my stories on it and a flashdrive, and i have it under password protection. (i'm a bit paranoid about something happening to all my stories, so ive protected them as best i can and made copies). anyway, that's all i have to say on the subject of laptops.

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    I hear you about saving copies of your stories. When I was halfway through writing my first novel (book? long story?), I ran around for an hour trying to find the Kingston it was located on. I was totally freaking out and found it in my clean pair of pants that had just gone through the washer and dryer. Now, I'm a bit overly protective about things. Learn from mistakes, right?

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    ... That would be a good idea for me, if I had Microsoft Word on my mom's Mac. xD

    I write Flash (and many other stories, such as Parrot, Sun-Jewel, Sorin's TIGER[I think], The Curtain[Again... I think] and Dazzle Me) with Word cause the Mac's TextEdit bugs me, and my dad wants to get rid of our PC.

    I'm like... "No. I need it."

    I really don't want to write that out. My stories are always better when I'm typing them. Prime example: My first short story Freedom Scales. Had to hand write it for school. It sucked. Tried to redo the basic idea typed? Way cooler.

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    Heyy! I'm a blooming author, writing, hoping someone would be able to read my stories someday. I'm so glad I found this convo! I hope you guys like this! It's a part of a book I'm writing. Tongue out



    Raela Sommers never had a normal life. Living on her own since the death of her parents at the age of 11, and finding out she has powers. Yes, powers. Demonic powers. Guess, her parents forgot to mention that they sold her soul to the devil. Now, she lives in the forest of Salem, with others like her. Jackson, Taylor, Kris, Fairyn, Sam, Alice, Doyle, Kariella, and Raela have to fight for their survival or else, the people they love will die. Can they survive the apocolypse? Or will the demons in the shadows kill them?

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    Wow...cool premise. The only real critique I have is that there are a couple of tense problems. It changes verb tense and gets kind of confusing for the reader. There were parts I had to look back over to make sure I understood. Like the second sentence should read something like, "She had been living on her own since the death of her parents at the age of 11, and finding out she had powers." Does that make sense? Otherwise, I would love to see more of this story in the future. It's something I would buy from a bookstore for sure.

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    Wow, thank you so much for saying that. And it does make sense. This is only a rough draft though...

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    It's no problem :D That's what this forum is here for. And that's what rough drafts are for!!

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    I am totally and completely stuck! I can't even think of a topic. I'm completely at ends. Does anyone have any tips on how to start?

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    welcome, new bloomers! it's always great to see new stories on here. that was definitely a cool little summary thingy, I would pick that up for sure. I love kids with weird powers :)
    well, geniusbooky, what happens to me a lot of times is, I get this vivid image of a character or a scene... but no plot :) so my advice would be, just write. tap around at the keyboard or doodle or something until you get a brainwave. trust me, once you start, you can work out a plot. but if you still need a topic: rebellion; genocide; war, civil or world are best; or, if you have a gift for obscure poetry, write a poem and make it a prophecy.
    sorry if I just killed you :) I'm enthusiastic
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    because I have absolutely no self-control, this story is entirely new. I know, I know.... but I swear I really am working on Flames, too. I have a problem :)
    but anyway, here's the first part.


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    I have about 35 pages of my book, Love, Life, and Family. Some of the chararters are based on real people that I know. Some scences are also things that have happened to me and teh rest is all stuff from my imagination that I spent a year daydreaming about before writing anything down.
    Ok, I started to summeriaze it, but that got way out of hand. So I'm just going to paste the first page of my book here instaed. The page is an excerpt from KC's brand new diary and also the introduction. Note: The whole book is not in the form of a diary.

    KC's PRIVATE Diary

                                                                 YOU TOUCH, READ, OR MESS WITH AND YOU DIE!

    All right, well I never really got the point of a diary or a journal (or the difference between the two), but I guess it would be nice to have a place to rant about something and not be told to shut up or that something was MY fault. So I will pretend that you're a person who doesn't know me and start from the beginning.

    My name is Kate Collins, and I just turned 13. My b-day is June 16, which is today actually. I got this for my b-day. I'm home-schooled, meaning I don't have very many friends. I'm also in Girl Scouts and 4-H, though I don't want to be in either but I stay to make my mom happy.
    My mom is never happy because Bryan, my father/her husband, is a *, even though he works and pays for food and the house, etc. He's not physically violent, unless he's drunk, which is rare; he just screams at us a lot and slams things. I'm still waiting for him to hit one of us, though. I'm not wishing it to happen, but it has to happen eventually. And when it does, I'm hoping that he hits me, not mom. I don't think she would be able to take it. She refuses to divorce him because she would have to get a full time job (she has a part time job right now) and find money to get the divorce and go to court to fight for the house and stuff. Then she would have to make enough money to support the two of us, plus her mother who is retired and lives in a little senior citizen complex and needs lots of medicine because she is a breast cancer & heart failure survivor. Also, she has some insane idea that it will scar my childhood if I don't have a father. Guess what, mom. I'm already scarred.

    Mom's outlet from all of this is raising rabbits. Mine's running and swimming. I have to help mom with rabbits because she has a bad back, and can't lift rabbit cages for the rabbit shows she goes to and do pans for the 40 rabbits she has, etc.

    So yeah, that's my boring, horrible, depressing life. Oh, wait, did I mention that I'm what my mom calls a Sensor, meaning I'm empathic? And if you don't know what that means, it means that I can read minds and sense emotions (that's why she calls us "Sensors"). But I block it all out and my mom thinks that I can do almost nothing at all. The truth is I'm actually a lot stronger than she is. Yeah, she's a Sensor too. A WEAK one, though, and she can't send thoughts to other, none empathic, people as I can. Her mother can send thoughts, but not read them, so mom calls her a Sender. I don't think that mom even knows it's possible to be both a Sensor and a Sender, which exactly what I am.

    Uh, uh, uh. And my new neighbor, Devin, I've been Sensing everything he feels and Hearing everything he thinks. It's really weird, because I keep mental barriers up to keep all that crap out. I must have a crack in my barriers that he's strong enough to breach. I need to find it before I accidentally end up invading his whole mind.

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    um......
    tres confused. is this supposed to be like on earth or some parallel universe? or.....
    ?????
    ok, putting the whole Sensor thing into the last paragraph really threw me off. you should have started sooner with, like, mentioning Sensing something that her dad thought, and then explaining about Sensors. and don't go off about heritage. that can come later.
    ???

    Posted Mar 08, 2010, 12:04:06 AM

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    This is on Earth.
    Yea, I'll see what I can do to move the Sensor paragraph up. This is really just a draft... so I still have a lot of editing to and stuff.
    Thanks!

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    Okay, remind me to never take a day off and have to read all this stuff again. xD

    Well, I'm drawing a blank for Renegade except this once scene that is Neo's supposed origin story. Others include just showing up at the door and demanding to be let in, and being Nightflier's relative... BUT I like this one better.

    So... here it is.

    Jayling approached the old, broken down dragon slowly. His bleached-gray scales were dull and thin cracks ran through them. They were forced together on his neck by the thick iron collar. His neck was hanging low to the ground and his milky eyes were squinting at the earth his cracked, dusty talons overturned. The dragon didn't look up as Jayling stepped over, wings rustling uneasily.

    "Excuse me, sir," he said softly. "What is your name?"

    The dragon glanced up wearily and clawed more earth up, sniffing at it to search for the traces of metal and salt desired from the traders that owned these slaves. "Na'es doe' matt' 'ere, Mas," he said, his voice broken and growling, like he hadn't spoken for a while. "On'y 'erk matt' 'ere."

    Jayling paused and took a moment to untangle the words, then asked, "So you have no name?"

    The old dragon shook his head and took a step forward, his wings drooping as he found nothing of value.

    "Are there any here with names?" Jayling pressed, taking a step forward. He was eager to learn what he could about this large group of tattered dragons.

    The dragon gave him a measured look, then turned his gaze a few rows down, at a bright splosh of color. "Sh' 'as a na'e."

    "Thank you," Jayling murmured, dipping his head and opening his wings. He beat up into the air and touched down again by the bright dragon.

    This dragon was very young. Jayling's age at the oldest. She was bright orange with white splotches. She was very spiky, with sharp spines running down her back, a frill of horns ringing her face, and spiny scales crowning her eyes.

    "Do you have a name?" Jayling asked.

    The young she-dragon glanced up at him mistrustfully. "Yes," she muttered.

    Jayling blinked. "What is it?" he asked.

    "I call myself Neo. Better than what my parents gave me. But it don't matter. Names don't matter here, only work does." At this last statement, her words took on a dull, beaten-into-the-brain sound.

    "Do you speak much?" Jayling asked. Her voice struck him as strange; it sounded more well-worn, like it was used more than once every few years.

    "I might," Neo snapped.

    "How did you come here?" Jayling pressed. He wanted to know more about this young dragon.

    "Sold here about a month ago," Neo said, digging her talons into the ground and tearing it apart. "That's why I don't talk like the others. They were born here. They didn't really learn how to speak right."

    Jayling nodded. "How would you like to leave?"

    Neo looked at him, her wide amber eyes becoming wider. "Who are you to offer that?" she demanded hungrily.

    "Prince Jayling," he said, a serious half-smile playing on his face. "Now do you want to come with me?"

    "Yes. Can we go now?" she asked eagerly.

    "Of course. Can you fly?"

    "Watch me." Neo spread her wings, narrowed her eyes, and launched herself towards the clouds. With a smile, Jayling followed.

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    Hm? Which story, Flash?

    Well, I'm still writing it... it's about three-four chapters long right now. And I left my flash drive at my friends house so I can't work on it anywhere but my dad's computer upstairs.

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    Booklover12 wrote:

    This is on Earth.
    Yea, I'll see what I can do to move the Sensor paragraph up. This is really just a draft... so I still have a lot of editing to and stuff.
    Thanks!

    Okay so because I don't want to scare you off with my Jedi (or Sith, depending on which way you look at it) editor ways (the Force is strong with me, and I'm not tooting my own horn), I'm only going to give you one piece of major advice; organization is everything. Group things that matter and ditch things that don't. Don't go drunk dad --> rabbits --> OMG POWERS! You'll supremely confuse your audience. Other than that, I like the idea and you obviously have talent. I'd like to see a revised draft of this, as well as more of the story!! Keep writing!

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    so I finished Outcast the other day. for anyone who knows Flames, Outcast happened four years earlier. I never go into how or why Shadow was banished, so this is his story, from when he was orphaned to when he met Zenith.

    critique, anyone?

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    Shadowflight, you always write so smoothly that I don't have anything bad to say. For a story in this genre, you have the perfect amount of dialogue and action which I really like. And congrats for finishing Outcast! :D

    Booklover, you are great at writing in the journal format. I gave up on that years ago because the way I wrote it sounded dumb. Great job!

    DangerousVampire, I love the plot! I would also pick it up. It's more of a synopsis instead of an excerpt though. Which is great when you're just starting! You know where the story is going.

    GeniusBooky, if you're looking for inspiration, go out and rent a classic movie like Some Like It Hot or White Christmas. Or an action movie if you want to write something fast-paced. Or a scary movie if you want to work on your descriptions. Make sure not to copy the storylines, of course, but it usually gives me inspiration to start a new story and a new character. It's fun too! Smile

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    I have another idea!!! *fails at sticking to one*

    Okay, so I'm always annoyed when I read about like human domination over dragons etc. Dragons are stronger and better built, so I came up with a story where the dragons are supreme and the humans are like, lesser.

    I don't have too much of a plot yet, but I think I'm going to have it take place in the castle where the ruling family (The Lichtens) live... I designed all of them. Except I forgot the queen's name... The children are:

    Princes- Neolichten, Skialichten

    Princesses- Ramalichten, Nychtalichten

    Yup. I have one other character planned out, an old like nanny. His name is Ormor.

    Here's basically the opening scene... sort of. It's pretty much the history of the story.

    It was a long time ago that the dragons finally evolved into suitable intelligence and conscience to be considered sentient beings. But when they did, the humans decided they needed to be put in their place and waged war on the dragons. However, being smarter, better built, and better able to get along with each other, the dragons won the war and established their rule over the Earth. It's true that some humans left the country founded by the dragons and formed groups of their own to live in. But the majority of all creatures live in the great Dracconi, and are ruled by the dragons.

    Every country needs someone in charge, and the dragons found a monarchy worked best for them. So the greatest general from the war was chosen to be king. And so the great Kyla ruled over Dracconi for years, and then passed it on to his daughter Yahal. She first established the tradition of two names: one to be used to refer to an individual, the second to the family. For herself, she chose the ancient word for "dragon": lichten. And so the Ruling Family was born.

    Now there is a new Ruling Family. Queen {Insert name here} stands over the great Shining Sea of Hydrage, and with her stand her children: Prince Neolichten, Prince Skialichten, Crown Princess Ramalichten, and Princess Nychtalichten. And before them stretches something the State of Dracconi has never had to face before. Not only war from without, but possible rebellion from within...

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    huh. that sounds kinda like my new story, except I'm doing it from practically the exact opposite point of view. I'm writing about the resistance.
    I know maybe you won't like to hear this, but maybe you should try writing about something other than dragons.  they're great and all, but there's really only so much you can write about them. or, something that worked for me once was, I had like three stories that all had sort of the same thing going on, and I picked my favorite plotline and meshed them into that one. it took some work, but the actual story was better than any of the original ones.
    just an idea, if you think that you've got too many ideas running around.

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    Hi, everyone!! =) How are you all? I haven't been on in like forever.

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    I'm good. How are you? : )

    Pf, whenever I try to write about anything other than some sort of mythical creature with wings (dragon, gryphon, phoenix...) I always hit a blank and turn back to my dragons. xD

    But I had another idea! I love Greek mythology, and the Percy Jackson series, so I felt like doing something similar. My story line is basically the gods died because no one believed in them anymore, and only a few minor gods, like Thanatos (god of death) still survived. My main characters are children of titans, who still exist. It's pretty much them doing what their parents ask and battling the children of the remaining gods. I have names, but not all parents.

    Demititans:

    Holly - Kronos

    Benny - Unsure...

    Izzi - Atlas

    Julia - Hyperion

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    Dezzy - Unsure (possibly Nemesis)

    Spoof - Ate

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    I'm good, for what its worth in this blistery weather. lol

    Hey, Crewe, that's a good idea! Greek Mythology is becoming really popular right now. Did you hear about HarperTeen buying a trilogy that was marketed as a 'Percy Jackson for girls' for 7 figures? The books are based on Homer's the Illiad and set in modern times. They don't come out until 2011 and already they're negotiating foreign and film rights.
    This is a very rare thing put its pretty interesting. =)

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    I love making "villains" as my main characters. I've actually had the character Holly before. She was also evil, but I luffled her so. : )

    Percy Jackson for girls? Pf, Percy and Annabeth are good enough for me.

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    yeah, I dunno if "for girls" sounds promising. if it's full of makeup and dating and pink I'm gonna have to protest. that would be a travesty. hopefully it's girls like Annabeth, not girls like, I dunno, Mean Girls. but if it's funny...... I suppose it'll be okay.

    so a while ago I posted up a prologue, and I just sorta finished my general idea for the story that it goes with. so, the main character is a girl named Mena - about 18 I think - who's an orphan, raised by the templefolk [btw, if you didn't read my prologue, there are four gods of Wind, Water, Earth, and Fire]. Then the King of Ellikath is murdered, and there is no heir. His firstborn daughter was supposed to take over, but she dissapeared years ago, and the King was killed before his got around to naming another heir [b/c he wanted his daughter to come back, ect, ect, b/c otherwise I don't have a story, k vroengirl?] anyway, so Princess Izmenabel turns out to be Mena. She heads for the palace, but a few days away she meets up with a large group of people: a lot of craftsmen and town people trying to get out of Janora, the capital city, and some of the Royal Knights. they tell her that a member of the court has captured the rest of the royal family and usurped the throne. Mena becomes the leader of a resistance.... and there are sure to be some other cool characters, and et cetera.
    but it's new. any suggestions?

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    Uhm... I'm guessing you want suggestions other than me telling you to not use "et cetera" in your story. And I've got a question: why does Mena forget she's Izmenabel? Did she run away and suffer from amnesia, or is she like, kidnapped as a baby? And shouldn't the Gods already know that she's the heir to the throne already? Why re-choose her? That doesn't seem very godlike of them. And does she choose to go to the capital by herself, or was there some guiding from these Gods, specifically the one who's, uh, friends (?) with her? So now I'll give you a suggestion; you're writing about a resistance movement. That means killing people off. There have to be consequences and sacrifices. Don't make more than four people who are absolutely INVALUABLE to the plot.

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    Hey guys. I came across this book at my local library and read it. It was a lot of help! It's called "Writer's Little Helper" by James V. Smith, Jr. It helps a lot with starting a new story or revising an old one. I recommend that everyone should get a copy of it! It's so simple to read and easy to stay reading. The colored pages really keeps my ADHD entertained.

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    ok, miss morbid, any specific suggestions? there are a few secondary characters: Mena's best friend, her former mentor, another cleric who's like a brother, a young knight who swore fealty to her, and a Silva warrior who is said knight's best friend. that's about it, none absolutely crucial. aren't you proud? I'm pared down from six to one!

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    Do I have anything specific? No. Just saying. If I were to go off of just the roles, the mentor (Cry), and brother boy. After that, the Silva warrior is the least important and first on the list for recovering from a mortal wound.

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    ok....
    hey, so the Oregon Writing Festival draws near once again! What're you taking?

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    Well because we got squeezed in at the last second, I got the papers to go Tuesday and had to decide last night. I would have taken something new, but I didn't have time to write anything. So, I'm taking Max's death. I contemplated taking the same thing as last year, but I liked Doomed better. What are you taking? This new one?

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    ha, rishel still hasn't given us actual documentation. :) but we'll get there. no, I think I'm taking Mirage. or possibly a poem......

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    I'll critique later. I haven't really had time...

    I wrote this while watching a storm. I'm currently at the beach for Spring Break.

    The ocean is endless. Between the hazy, undefined line of the never ending horizon, and the muted tan sand that makes up the beach, the waves rise and fall with unrelenting fervor. One or two gnarled rocks rise from the blue-grey water about a hundred yards from the shoreline, but after them, there is nothing to break the swells. Every few seconds, waves crash over these rocks, the white foam at the forefront of the curling tide, devouring the stark black like a hungry animal, or attacking it like the foot soldiers of an immense, unstoppable army of surging water. When it recedes, giving the weary rock an infinitesimal relapse, ocean spray peels off of the rough, mussel adorned surface, helped by the blowing wind.

    Dimly recognizable is the line where the ocean meets the sky; the harsh, steel blue fades into soft white and grey and you realize you can no longer see the dancing whitecaps. In an instant, the scene changes and the clouds pour rain into the roiling expanse. A fog obscures the horizon further as the white hanging behemoths dip to skim the moving surface. With one more blink comes another change and the vast waves take on a green hue.

    It is said that * hath no fury like a woman’s scorn. The ocean is another matter entirely. The undulating, roaring waves threaten to engulf anything and everything it its path. Turn your back on her waters for a moment and she may sweep your legs from under you without a care, her tide pulling you from the safety of the sand to the uncertain, murky, turbidity of her embrace. The almighty power in the sluices of the deep commands unwavering respect. Betray that reverence, and, like a candle in an unforgiving wind, not even one second will separate you from being extinguished forever.

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    Wooow! vroengirl, that was great! Very vivid, and poetic. I likes it. hehe =)

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    so, I have to write a children's book for english class. it has to be a social justice theme, for the same reason that pow's are tortured before they're killed. ugh. ideas?

    Posted Apr 07, 2010, 06:43:51 PM

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    shadowflight13 wrote:

    so, I have to write a children's book for english class. it has to be a social justice theme, for the same reason that pow's are tortured before they're killed. ugh. ideas?

    hm.. have something to do with animals! :) animals should always be in a children's book.

    although, you've probably already written the thing by now haha.. care to share?

    Posted Apr 13, 2010, 09:09:43 PM

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    shadowflight13 wrote:

    ok....
    hey, so the Oregon Writing Festival draws near once again! What're you taking?

    *is jealous*

    Posted Mar 18, 2010, 01:59:34 PM

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    What's the Oregon Writing Festival?

    Anyway, I'm all excited and snuff cause my mom got a new computer, and even though its a Mac, it has Microsoft Word. : ) I also put Flash on my flash drive, so I can work on it on both computers, and if I have any time to do whatever, I can even work at school. : )

    Posted Mar 18, 2010, 06:06:38 PM


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    Thanks for your advice guys!
    Funny how things happen. I was in the middle of science class and it came to me. We were watching a video and I got this idea.

    It goes somewhat like this:

    The main character, Simone Harper is being isolated.
    Simone's ex-best friend, Summer, thinks Simone kissed her boyfriend.
    Simone's parents are a football player and a model.
    Then Elaina, who's Summer's new bff, likes Rob, Simone's friend whose dad plays on Simone's dad's team.
    Then Elaina catches the two of them hugging. And fights with Simone.
    The pricipal comes and Simone bolts.
    Right now in her car, she's with Keith. Keith won't budge, so she's stuck with him.

    That's as far as I've gotten, written page 8.
    I have no plotline. I'm just working off instinct.

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    GirlwiththeBraids-- Thanks, but that's really just liek the introductin the rest of the book is in KC and Devin's POV.

    Posted Apr 14, 2010, 03:35:27 PM

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    Thank you so much!!
    Ill see if i can figure out how to send the story to you(I'm way new at this so...)

    Oh and sorry it took me so long to reply I've been super busy and kind of forgot about this site.

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     vroengirl08- Ok, I just figured out that we cant personal message on the site and I can't paste my book to the forum because its already about 39 pages long. So how would you like me to send it to you?

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    vroengirl08- Ok, I just figured out that we cant personal message on the site and I can't paste my book to the forum because its already about 39 pages long. So how would you like me to send it to you?

    If you want, you can email it to me at *. I'll take my email down in a couple days, but if you still need it I can put it back up. :D

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    Heyy Guys! I know it's been a while since I posted. I've been working on my story and it's going great! Unfortunately am at a Writer's Block, (ughh) and ended up leaving that one behind. I started a new one called Under the Blood Red Eclipse. Okay so before I post up this excerpt, I'ma explain the characters then what happened so far.

    Fairyn Angelica Rose (Real Name is Starr Angelica Night)--
       Fairyn looks like the typical teenager, Long Brown hair, Blazing Green eyes that seem to stretch for miles when you look into them, and fair skin. But her past makes her an outcast. With her mother gone for most of her life, all she has felt was resentment from her father as he has been beating her for 10 years now. But ever since the Blood Red Moon appeared, she had finally got the courage to get away. To live her life, anew. As a Vampyre. However, its hard when your dating another vampire, who gets the occasional urges to kill. But that doesn't stop her from loving Scott Marxman. Not even her dead mother... Or so it seems...

    Scott Marxman (Yes, that is his real name)--
       Scott has always been alone, no friends, no girlfriend, nothing. Being an outcast is just the same as being if you were never born. When that Red Moon rose, he felt as if it was a new life, and that's what he got. Now, as a Vampyre dealing with the challenges of bloodlust and turning, he struggles to find the purpose in his life. When he meets Fairyn in that little bookstore, only a couple of blocks away from his now empty house after his parents ran off, finding out he was a Vampyre, he felt as if that meant he found someone finally. And he didn't know at that time that she felt the same way.

    ..............The Story So Far..............

    After Fairyn and Scott met, they instantly became friends and decided to stay together, not knowing that in the very close yet distant future, they'd be more than that. Dealing with the life changing expierience of becoming a Vampyre they struggle to stay alive as Fairyn's past comes to haunt her. After a near death expierience, Scott and Fairyn become closer than ever in just a mere second. But after 20 minutes of complete and utter suffering, Fairyn had died from being bitten by another Vampyre, a new type for that matter, leaving three words to echo through Scott's mind, 'I Love You.' Scott had felt the same way. Desperate to bring her back, he had given her blood, her first taste, and successfully brought her back. Shortly after they realized why they felt the way they did, it became clear that they loved eachother. However, they didn't realize that someone was watching them.

    An Excerpt of Under the Blood Red Eclipse

    Scott?" I whispered, thinking hard. Suddenly, an image flashed into my brain and I saw Scott in unbearable pain. My eyes widened and I spun around, my wet hair getting in my face, and started to run hard my feet pounding against the slippery surface, the rain pounding on me, thunder lighting up the sky. Just as I was going to go into the alleyway, I slipped and crashed into the concrete ground, my side in complete agony. Dissmissing the pain, worried more about Scott than anything else right now, I crawled towards him. When I finally reached him, I put my hand on his chest and shook him slightly, my other hand clutching my side, "Scott? Scott, wake up. Scott!!" I yelled, tears welling up in my eyes as the rain came down harder. I then clutched his shirt with both hands and shook him violently, desperately trying to wake him up. I needed him, if he was gone, I wouldn't be able to live. He was the only good, no BEST thing in my life. "I need you," I cried, then kissed him on the lips, hard, hoping that would wake him up. I placed both hands on his cheeks and kissed him deeper, tears continuing to slide down my face as the rain continued to splash onto the ground around us.

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    Wow, DangerousVampire13. I really like the excerpt! When I was reading through the character profiles and summary of the story so far, you repeated a lot of the same words, though. Just to let you know. Be really careful of that in your story. You don't want to lose your audience's interest! Keep going. :)

    Posted May 06, 2010, 10:34:36 AM

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    Thank you so much!!! I love having criticism even if its bad. :) Thanks.

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    I have news!!!!
    I have started a new story and am now past page 50 (handwritten)! that makes it the longest story I have currently in progress.  anyway thought I would share that.
    that aside, DV13 (can i call you that?), that was really good.  Is there more? *making puppy dog eyes*

    Posted May 07, 2010, 04:26:57 PM

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    "If it's worth doing, it's woth overdoing"
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           Brisingr pg. 200

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    Lol, its kk if you call me that. And thanks a bunch! Congratulations on the handwritten story. That I can't even do, lol. Yes there is more. I might post some more but I don't know..

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    Okay, while I haven't been able to work on Flash (meaning I'm too lazy to get the updated version on my flash drive) I got this new idea from a scene in Avatar: The Last Airbender. The scene was a dream where one of the main characters was Firelord and was being advised by two dragons. I liked that idea and crafted up a main character, a queen, two dragons, and a couple of supporting characters. Unable to think of a beginning, I came up with this scene, which will probably go somewhere in the middle:

    "No, you see, she is not advised by humans, child. She is advised by dragons."

    Narai frowned at the old man, resting her chin on her knees. "But Grandpa, I thought dragons were a myth."

    Yakun chuckled and said, "Dragons are as mythical as those that can control the natural world," making Narai blush.

    Rook frowned and leaned forward from behind Narai, casting the lower half of his body in shadow and bathing his face in firelight. "But... I thought people like that were mythical," he said, sounding confused. "I mean, they don't really exist, do they?"

    The old man laughed again. "Not mythical, only rare. Very much like dragons. Young man, how long have you known my granddaughter?"

    "Not long. Lianna and I only met up with Narai a few weeks ago. She explained her mission to us, and we decided it was the best deal we'd get." Rook shrugged, and his sister nodded.

    "I see. And have you ever seen her cook?" Yakun asked.

    Lianna raised a hand from her lap. "No. When Narai cooks, we're usually somewhere else. Keeping watch or gathering wood or something."

    Narai lowered her head, though not fast enough to hide the rising blush.

    Yakun nodded. "Ah. Well, Narai, I'll admit I'm disappointed. You haven't told your new friends?"

    "I was going to... eventually," Narai mumbled, still staring down at the firewood.

    "Well, now's as good a time to let them now as any," Yakun said. He sat up a little straighter and looked Rook and Lianna in the eye. "My granddaughter has the ability to control the element of fire."

    Rook and Lianna looked at each other, then at Yakun, then at Narai.

    "No way. Narai, is that really true? You can control fire?" Rook demanded, gazing at her intently.

    Narai looked up, but not at him. She kept staring at the fire, which seemed to get just a little brighter. "Yes," she said. "I can make and control fire." A smile twitched at her lips and she looked sideways at her companions. "Want to see?"

    "Yes!" Lianna said at once, grabbing her brother's shoulder to pull herself forward or a better view.

    "Stand back." Narai got to her feet and brushed the dust off her pants, brushing a strand of hair out of her face. She extended a fist, staring at the fire with intense concentration. Suddenly, she flicked her wrist, at the same time extending her fingers, so she was standing with her fingers pointing up. The fire roared and the image of a dragon twisted out of it, long, serpentine body coiled behind it and slender wings folded against its body. It leaped up towards the sky, and dissolved into sparks as Narai lowered her hand.

    Rook and Lianna started at the fire, then at Narai, who smiled sheepishly and sat down. Yakun smiled smugly.

    "There you are, fire manipulation. And the image you've chosen, Narai, brings us back to our original topic of conversation. The great queen's advisors." With this, Yakun paused and looked around, meeting each of the three's eyes. "The Great Lady has two advisors: the blue dragon, and the red dragon. Issan and Raessan. Ice and Fire."

    Rook raised a hand and Yakun raised an eyebrow. "Well, uh, Yakun, sir... what are the dragons like?"

    "I was getting to that," Yakun said, turning back to his story. "Let's begin with the blue dragon, Issan. She is the elder. Issan is the more... shall we say, serpentine of the two. She will curl herself around you without you knowing it, and then kill you without you realizing she intends you pain. This makes her a dangerous enemy, and powerful ally. Now, the other, Raessan, he's much more outspoken. He is not one for hiding and words. He is bold and blunt, and easily angered. However, he appreciates honor, loyalty, and courage. He may be violent, but to those that being violent to will further his cause."

    "Which would you rather have as an enemy, sir?" Lianna asked, clearly thinking hard.

    "Oh, that is easy. Raessan. He would have the decency to tell you he's going to kill you, and will give you a fair fight. Though he'll fight ferociously."

    "What about an ally?" Rook asked.

    "Raessan again. Issan is as likely to turn on you as your enemy. Raessan will honor any agreement you make with him."

    "Grandpa, how did the queen get two dragons as advisors?" Narai asked.

    "I'm not sure, Narai. But there is a myth surrounding them. Legend has it that all those that control fire can trace their lineage back to Raessan. And all those that control ice or water are related to Issan.There are two others, shrouded in mystery, that gave birth to control over earth and air. Though," Yakun said, with a self-satisfied smile, "I am fortunate enough to know their names."

    Rook, Lianna, and Narai exchanged glances, then looked back at Yakun expetantly.

    "The Earth-father is called Tehssan. The Air-mother is named Aessan. Where they live, if they are indeed alive, is unknown. But Raessan and Issan have chosen not to go into hiding, and have allied themselves with our Great Lady."

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    That's AWESOME ShadowStalker! I'm really happy for you. It's always really cool to hit those landmark checkpoints. Would you share some of it with us now that you're there?

    I'm currently working on my IT story, as well as an add-on with a bunch of my friends. Doomed (IT story) is now 115 pages long and growing every time there's a lull in homework. I'm currently in a mood where I'm constantly wishing I could be writing, but every time I sit down in front of the computer, I go blank. :/ It's all rather annoying.

    What's everyone been reading lately? And (the obvious question) writing? Any annoying school assignments out there? I have to write 2 poems modeled after William Carlos Williams. One like the This Is Just To Say poem and another on a different poem also involving plums...(I was gone the day it was assigned so I'm not exactly sure what poem it was.)

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    Ugh, pretty much ALL my English assignments are annoying. We have two weeks to write a no-more-than-8-no-less-than-6 paragraph memoir. I HATE memoirs. Actually, I more than hate them. I despise them with a passion.

     

     

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    Yeah, memoirs are no fun. Personal narratives in general are amazingly suckish. I always have the hardest time with those...

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    I mostly am writing more and more of my two books: Dark Secrets a Haunted Novel & Crimson Moons and Bloody Suns: a Blood Red Eclipse Novel.

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    I've been working mostly on Flash. I emailed it to my teacher and she said it looked good when she gave it a quick once-over, but she never emailed me with more in-depth feedback like she promised.

     

    I FINALLY came up with a way to move the plot along! It's a new character, because I love overloading that. xD Plus, I just randomly pictured her in my head with the words to the scene that revolved around her, and I'm like YES! THAT'S how it'll happen!

     

    I also designed a character that will probably never be, but I know what she looks like and what her world is. And who her two best friends are. And her pet parakeet.

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    "Is this the result of mass comunication? Worldwide brain death?"
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    "Yeah, cause that's not loopy at all."
    -- Danny

     

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    If ignorance is bliss, why aren't more people happy?

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    That's awesome, Crewe! Don't you love that feeling when everything is coming together? Smile

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    This is the beginning of one of my better stories:

     

    Alina drew the dark hood closer around her face as she hurried through the dark streets, trying to blend in with the shadows.  She knew the pendant she clasped in her hand would protect her from any harm but she’d rather not have to use it.  She came to a corner and paused, glancing around.  When she was sure there was nothing waiting for her she darted around the corner and down the next street.  Avoiding detection was crucial for survival. 

           As she hurried back to the safe house, she looked around and observed the ruins of this once great city sadly.  The majestic buildings with their great spires were crumbling and covered in scorch marks and the cobblestone street had grass and weeds sprouting up through the cracks.  She briefly closed her eyes and saw a vision of blooming trees, sparkling stain-glass windows, and laughing, happy people going about their business, but when she opened them again, all she saw was decay and despair.  She shook her head to rid herself of such thoughts then turned down the alley that led to the safe house.

           The safe house was expertly hidden and none but the most trained eye could spot it.  Even some of those who knew where it was had trouble finding it again if they went out. The entrance looked like nothing of importance from the outside; a sheet of metal lying on the ground.  There was a small hole in the surface of the metal that in which one could insert a key.  When unlocked, one could open the metal like a door and be admitted into an underground tunnel.  The sunlight was almost gone when Alina arrived at the door.  She pulled a small key on a chain from around her neck and was in the process of inserting it into the hole when she heard a distant shriek.  She glanced skyward then quickly opened the door and disappeared into the dark tunnel. 

    As she placed the key back around her neck she heard the door slam behind her and the lock click then heaved a sigh of relief as the darkness engulfed her.  This darkness was comforting.  This darkness meant safety.  She hurried down the dark tunnel without hesitation; she had been down it so many times now.  When the tunnel began curving right she knew she was almost there.  Alina heard the soft murmur of voices before she reached the large oak door.  She smiled to herself at the thought of those who were waiting eagerly for her return.  

    She turned the heavy brass door knob and the voices went silent.  She walked into the room and threw back her dark hood, revealing her youthful face and the abundant brown curls that hung loosely down her back.  The atmosphere of the room immediately lightened as the tension leaked out.  Several people grinned and waved at her but most people just went back to what they were doing before she came in, pretending that nothing happened.  Alina was used to such treatment; they were jealous.  They wanted to go outside again, too.  Some had never seen anything beyond the safe house, but it was too dangerous.  They knew that.   

    Alina unfastened the clasp of her cloak and hung it on a peg beside the door then dropped her bag lightly on the tread bare carpet.  She heard footsteps behind her and smiled.  “Hey Vincent,” she said.

     

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    I'm not sure who all gets on here anymore...but HI :D The summer boredom is just now hitting me, I've been doing a lot of writing lately andhad nearly forgotten about this place until now.  I'm sure I'll be on here a lot just like last summer, if anyones actually still here lol

    Posted Jul 09, 2010, 01:33:45 AM

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    Lol. Same here. D:

    Posted Jul 24, 2010, 10:55:32 PM

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    Haha, I was just thinking "What else is there to do?" and I came back. : )

     

     

    Posted Jul 25, 2010, 06:46:16 PM


    "Is this the result of mass comunication? Worldwide brain death?"
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    "Yeah, cause that's not loopy at all."
    -- Danny

     

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    Hi guys :) Boy, it's been awhile. Layout kinda put everyone off? 

    I've done some writing since I last posted, and I wanted to share a piece I got published on teenink.com. I wondered if *swallows pride for shameless pitch* you guys could rate it? The link is http://www.teenink.com/nonfiction/memoir/article/231153/Nothing-We-Can-Do/   I'm trying to get it in the magazine :D

    What's everyone been writing lately? And manderzizawesome, I'll critique your piece probably this afternoon. I'm about to leave to go tutor, so I'll *hopefully* see you guys here soon! :)

    Posted Aug 12, 2010, 11:44:46 AM

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    I haven't written anything all summer. Except some poems for a writing workshop I left halfway through for vacation and camp...

     

    My dad's been bugging me to work on Flash for weeks. Maybe it'll start to pick up the pace during the school year when I'm more... academically inclined.

    Posted Aug 18, 2010, 03:55:18 PM


    "Is this the result of mass comunication? Worldwide brain death?"
    -- Thornbeak

    "Yeah, cause that's not loopy at all."
    -- Danny

     

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    I believe in dragons, good men, and other fantasy creatures.

    If ignorance is bliss, why aren't more people happy?

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    wow... someone's been gone WAYYY too long (that'd be me). hello again! well, I've climbed out of my Abyss just in time for school to start and suck all my free time into a chasm... oops... but anyway...

    hi crewe! long time no see. my fault. I get the non-writing thing.... I said that I was gonna have Flames finished by the end of summer. well, that means I have a week to finish it. *eye roll* yeah, right. It just seems like there's always more. sigh.

    but I would be grateful for some help. of course I still have vroengirl and she's been fantastic, but I think I need a second opinion on a very difficult question. can anybody help me?

     

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